Blazeroom
You’re fear lingers and your tear whispered everything
The land shook and the sky cried for the words that paralyze anything
What is life when the flower turns into a thorn?
I saw the black sun before it even raised
The mystery is over and I thought I could kill anyone
The wind will take what you left into ashes
The horizon was knocked when I stood smirking to the glum
The promises are forgotten as your soul vanishes
Everything is redefined yet the fangs didn’t fade
Your wings will burn and you get blind by my shade
Let this be it, so long blazing heart…

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Nicely written, but I didn't get it :)

nice

did u write it?

thanx

Thanks

Normalman, what do you think ? :)

thanks again :).

Man..you're just scary =P

i like this! i don't really know much about poetry..as i said a zillion times before xD
but i really like this one! :cute: there is something to it..i don't know..

your poems are usually so dark and beastly lol..this one is not any better :p
but i like it.

Thanks both, I would like to hear more comments if possible.

I always like reading your poems
I don’t know how I didn’t spot this one xD
I also don’t know much about poems :p xD
But I know I like reading them :cute:
And I absolutely loved this one
It’s just excellent
Some grammar work perhaps.. a bit of past/present/future tense confusion there, I think.
But the ideas, great! Creative :cute:
Haha I was gonna quote bits I especially liked but it turned out to be almost everything
Well done ^-^

Phat good job ;)
Your wings will burn and you get blind by my shade<< I love it :love: