Well, thanx partly to Phoenix because without reading her work, I wouldn't have given this stuff online.

I sometimes write stuff ... stuff I wouldn't call poems, but words that I feel when I am really down. And yes, I do go depressive sometimes! :rolleyes:

A few members would actually know what happened ... but here goes

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Every swing of the pundulum, I wonder why I was born
feel like I am a burden to this world
the shadow of pride and happiness eludes me to-date
Is it too tough to realize what I'm asking for?

I only longed for those 3 words,
those 3 words which meant a lot to me.
Years crept by, I remained expectant
never figured I was gullible
till the day you called 'telling me it was over'

What went wrong? Was I expecting too much?
You told me it felt good, when I held your hands
and felt your warmth
You would smile, when I laughed you through those testing times
What went wrong?

I am my own burden, too gullible to know the difference
thought you'd come back, but time sweept by
now I learn you're another man's.

Gun and a round of shots,
is it too tough to ask for?
..............

I am not looking for any praise ... just opened up a bit ... thanx once again to Phoenix! :)

I know you said that you weren't looking for any praise, but you most definitely deserve some :)

Very well written. It seems so "real". I guess when you write because of a real experience you've been through, everything seems deeper and more moving.

(too bad thats not the case with me! from the way I write, people would actually think that I've been through a lot.. but I haven't been through anything :D lol)

Keep up the wonderful work and show us more as you write them.

Shinoda

I agree with Phoenix. Your words are truly touching and surprisingly introspective for a male. I dont mean to offend men, but generally speaking they dont have the skill to be so emotionally expressive especially in such an eloquent way as you have been.

Keep them coming sir.

Thank you ladies!

I don't write a lot of stuff unless I am totally in a particular mood. I know I am not good, but feel good because you ladies appreciated it.

Anyways, I was under the influence of weed when I wrote this one! :rolleyes:

not bad mate. didnt know u had all that in u..especially after knowing what ur taste in music is like!

ugh!

i guess listening to a lil of aaliyah pays off. :sweat:

:rolleyes:

I'll hopefully write some gothically insane stuff when I am on pot next time! Lacked 'hurt' in this one ... well, not all that much!

Would it be too much if I asked some questions about the poem? :inno:

Go ahead :)

I only longed for those 3 words,

~What are the three words?

Gun and a round of shots,

~What exactly does this mean? :eek:


~Why did you title it "Burden"?

~What are the three words?

I thought you would figure it out. Anyways, 'I love you' :rolleyes:, I mean, in the real sense ... not formally ... you know!

~What exactly does this mean?

umm ... well, 'Gun and a round of shots' was a suicidal incentive ... lol. I wouldn't have shot myself ... but you know, weed doesn't only make you happy, it gives you a sadistic kick once you are over the peek.

~Why did you title it "Burden"?

I am my own burden. I dig my own grave. Had I not gone into a relationship for 4-5 years, I wouldn't have repented, might not have got onto weed, might not have made a cry over it.

Oh well :rolleyes:

Thanx for the questions ... appreciate it :)

'I love you'....... Yeah, I wanted to make sure I was right. :p

It's a really sad and emotional poem Shino.....

But I'll say one thing, some girl out there is missing out . ;)